What are you reading?

[Jason_Miao]

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/6789454/26/For-Want-of-a-War hey for want of a war updated *goes reading*

Oh yeah, I'd forgot to mention how he'd updated with chapter 25 a short while ago...wait, that's chapter 26.  *reads*

[Yuthirin]

Earthscorpion's Overlady has reached 60 chapters.

[thepanda]

Recoil has updated.

[Rukatin]

Oh hey, I forgot to mention that I'm updating my own Worm fanfic Daybreak again. Here's the link since I don't know how to do the highlighted text link things you guys do.

https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/daybreak-worm-oc-si.450048/#post-27500826

Tell me what you think!

[Merc]

Here's the link since I don't know how to do the highlighted text link things you guys do.

Use the bracketed command shown below:

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[url=link]link description[/url]

So Daybreak would be:

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[url=https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/daybreak-worm-oc-si.450048/#post-27500826]Daybreak[/url]

[Rukatin]

Here's the link since I don't know how to do the highlighted text link things you guys do.

Use the bracketed command shown below:

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[url=link]link description[/url]

So Daybreak would be:

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[url=https://forums.spacebattles.com/threads/daybreak-worm-oc-si.450048/#post-27500826]Daybreak[/url]

Thanks!

[Jason_Miao]

Tell me what you think!

Briefly,

Good:
Your main character isn't perfect.  Which is excellent, because perfect characters tend to be boring, so coming up with a main character who misses seemingly obvious cues is nice.  Also, most of your characters are personalized and have distinct voices, which is one of those things that people who write self-described SIs tend to mess-up. 

Other:
Your main character tends towards overly-exacting English phrasing at times.  Not always, but still threw me out of a few scenes.  I didn't notice it at all in the latest posted section (2.1).



I'll probably check back on this from time to time, as long as you're continuing to write.

[Rukatin]

Tell me what you think!

Briefly,

Good:
Your main character isn't perfect.  Which is excellent, because perfect characters tend to be boring, so coming up with a main character who misses seemingly obvious cues is nice.  Also, most of your characters are personalized and have distinct voices, which is one of those things that people who write self-described SIs tend to mess-up. 

Other:
Your main character tends towards overly-exacting English phrasing at times.  Not always, but still threw me out of a few scenes.  I didn't notice it at all in the latest posted section (2.1).



I'll probably check back on this from time to time, as long as you're continuing to write.

Thank you! That's one thing me and my co-author work on, as we both agree that perfect SI's make a bad fic.

And for the other thing? Could you quote the exact places you had problems with? I want to improve my writing after all.

[Anastasia]

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12327719/1/What-Do-You-Want

Ranma and Nabiki centric. Post wedding, Akane decides to break up with Ranma and it deals with the fallout from it. Much better than it sounds and well written.

[Dracos]

That was a simple but pleasant tale.  *follows it*

[Anastasia]

That was a simple but pleasant tale.  *follows it*

Yeah, I have a soft spot for a story that shows an actual crush in Ranma 1/2, not just the normal comedic wackiness. Pleasant is a great word for that story.

[Dracos]

That was a simple but pleasant tale.  *follows it*

Yeah, I have a soft spot for a story that shows an actual crush in Ranma 1/2, not just the normal comedic wackiness. Pleasant is a great word for that story.

Same :)

[Rukatin]

I keep forgetting that most of you are all die-hard Ranma 1/2 fans

[Yuthirin]

Gaming and Ranma fanfics are what this forum was started on!

[Merc]

Technically it was just on gaming.

Ranma fanfics was what the forum we sprung out of was started on.

=p

Also, don't quite know about the "die-hard" fan part. I haven't read a Ranma fanfic in almost 8 years before that one above, if I think about that.