[Ranma][dark] The Succession Technique

[Ginrai]

A Brothers^H production.

Enjoy... we hope >_>

[Dracos]

Bad Gin, Brian, Cor.

Dracos

[Merc]

You peoples is crazy! Crazy I tells youse! Oh, and youse reminds me ofsa Ukyo Can Cook too.

[Brian]

Yeah.  UCC inspired this, entirely.

The idea was that we were attempting to prove/disprove the "Implied Lesbian Sex Makes Anything Better" theorum.

[Olvelsper]

Heh. Amusingly insane fic. The implied lesbian affair theorem probably needs a few more fics under its belt before it can be proven either way, though. :p

[Jason_Miao]

First off, I did like the fic.  That said, kindly allow me to repeat what I said to Gin.  I think that this fic is missing a climax.  

Basically, I believe that the fic has to lead somewhere, and it doesn't.  Uniform Commercial Code(UCC) can get away with this, because it was merely intended as a spamfic.  The whole intent of that fic was to convey a point, and to do it well.  But your fic, because of how you've written it and its length, doesn't have that luxury.  If all you do is state "Ukyou makes an Akane Okonomiyaki" 10 times, it starts to get old.

Drastic changes aren't necessary.  Offhand, minimal effort possibilities include 1) Ranma finds out...and willing joins them.  2) Ranma finds out, and treats it like a training technique, trying to outdo them. ^_^ 3) Use the lesbianism aspect.  Ranma makes some comment on how his two wives enjoy eating each other out, and they both freak out, eyeing each other with speculative looks.  End the fic RIGHT there.

And if none of those work, here's a possible final scene outline, which I just thought up in my head.

"Grandpa..."
"Don't interrupt your Grandfather, Akane.  As I was saying, I know your mother emphasized the Okonomiyaki with you, but you must remember that your martial art foundation must be the principle of Anything Goes.  Planning, adapting, and instant timing must be your basic goals."
"But Grandpa..."
"Hush, Akane.  Now, look at your father!  Ranma is the epitome of adaptability, and every technique he has ever seen, he can learn and counter.  He was exposed to hundreds of different styles, and he improved on them all!"
"Grandpa...""
"And it was I who taught him everything he knows!  ...Well, not everything.  But the foundations of Anything Goes is what is really important.  And today, I will begin to teach you, so you too will be as powerful as he is."
"Grandpa..."
"You keep interrupting me, Akane.  What is it?!"
"Grandpa, I've finished my plate.  Can I have seconds?"
"Of course, of course.  You should have said something sooner.  A martial artist has to keep up his, or her, strength, you know.  Especially a master of Anything Goes, who knows how to take his enemy's most valuable techniques and to use it against that enemy.  And one day, dear Akane, you will be that master."

Since most people hate Genma to such a degree, the implication that he's better than any fiancee will probably cause people fits. Thus, if you're looking  for a warm reception to this fic, it's probably not a good idea to actually use this ending.  But I'm throwing it out here to show how one can use the reptition of culinary success and turn that concept on it's head, bring the fic to a cllimax, and make minimal changes in the fic itself.