Fanfic Feedback Please!

[bakashinji]

Please comment on these, I'd like any advice regarding my storytelling style and writing/grammar abilities.

http://www.fanfiction.net/profile.php?userid=126776

Thanks in advance!

[Dracos]

Oi.  You need to really work on writing instead of summerizing.

Reviewed one chapter of your works...presuming the rest of your works have the same flaw, you probably could copy paste the reviews to them all.

Fearless Leader

[bakashinji]

Hi!  Thanks for the review, sorry it took me so long to reply, gomen.

I have taken your advice, and among other things, there will be less Japanese used in them.