Here's an old poem of mine that I wrote mainly for the rhymes.
Once upon the stormy seas
I sat begging on my knees
Pleading to all the gods in heaven and hell
Even offering my soul to sell
But then I thought of family back home
And how I always wanted to roam
When I really should have been there instead
So I started angrily banging my head
On the slippery deck of blood and tears
I couldn't help thinking of all the wasted years
Why couldn't I appreciate all that I had
So I started feeling horribly sad
But in my grief, I didn't see the dawn
that signified finally that the storm was gone
My prayers had been answered, but in the sea I almost dived
When I noticed that only I had survived.
Hum, interesting. I think you lost a bit of coherency for the rhyme scheme you picked but it works out nice enough.
I enjoyed it. Good use of theme and rhyme.
Fearless Leader