[Haruhi] K:BDH chapter 56

[Brian]

Spent a bit of time lately distracted by work and side projects, primarily Outcast.  Even if it turns out it couldn't achieve one of its most critical goals.

Oh, well.  I'm happy with it on its own merits, and that means....  On to more optimistic nakama-centric works!  Namely, a long-overdue chapter of K:BDH!

Edit: Updated file. Again.

[alethiophile]

Ooh hey. :D

o.O Revelations!

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Shinobu paused briefly, collecting her thoughts and pursing her lips, face tilting the slightest bit higher. Taking a surprisingly shaky breath, considering how unflinching the maid had seemed in the past, she continued, "In some countries where women are not ... well respected, this free-spirited girl carelessly made some dangerous enemies.

"Those she had thought of as privileged and unable to understand the plight of those she wished to help. She had meant to help others, and instead had been careless of how her actions might hurt those around her. That is ... as an activist, she brought attention on herself and her nearest allies carelessly, and when she realized what danger she was in...."

First sentence of the second paragraph looks like a fragment. Is that meant to be a continuation of the last of the first paragraph?

"Yes!" the slider exclaimed happily, eyes wide. "That-- Okay!" Yuki recognized that was yet another instance where Kanae was glad to offer something to him and the others. Normally she would just save energy, but more and more she was recognizing that giving room

The paragraph seems to end there unexplainedly.

"You--" He paused, looking around. Probably because of the parlor's reputation, no one was within easy earshot. "You're claiming to be the finance of the legendary Kowa-Keigo-Kyon?"

I'm not entirely sure--how are you punctuating that title lately? I seem to recall earlier in-story it being 'Kowa-Keigo Kyon' instead.

[Empyrean]

Meh. Beat to the first response, so I'll remove the stuff that was already covered.

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Sigh bit back the urge to sigh wistfully

s/Sigh/She

"I should thank you," Sasaki said, shaking her head and offering the green-haired heiress a smile. "After all, without your help...." She trailed off and shrugged.

"Ah, thinks nothing of that," Tsuruya said, shaking her head. "Hmm, though-- I should apologize to you! When we met some time ago at the beach, I said some unkind things, which I shouldn't! A friend of Kyon's is a friend of mine, and so -- if you can, think of what I've done as an apology for that!"

Sasaki blinked, remembering that incident suddenly. It wasn't something that haunted her constantly ... but occasionally it did trouble her thoughts. Certainly, she didn't like that it seemed almost as though she came across as a villain to her friend and his friends.

"It's nothing," she said, shaking her head. "Sometimes there are mis-communications, and that ... well...." Being entirely honest, it did make her feel better that Tsuruya wanted to make amends for that. "I -- I wasn't at my best that day, either. But then, perhaps it's not constructive to dwell on that -- it's better to work toward a more positive future, isn't it?" Absolutely, there was no sense dwelling on how much she realized she was hurt by the revelation of Kyon's engagement.

Three out of four responses here involve head shaking. Dunno if that warrants fixing, but it kind of stood out.

"But otherwise," Tsuruya sighed, her smile fading, "there have been problems. Mmm, not with your fault, but with, eh, enemies in generals.

Dark generals, even. :)

especially if she could help distract the other girl from their mutual interesting Kyon!

s/interesting/interest in

She might not be as capable as the others in a lot of ways, but cheering Kyon up had to account for something, didn't it?

s/account/count

Even so, she didn't find the process typically enjoyable, and while she had the potential to do that ... or almost anything else the other girls who gave him attention, she recognized the importance of worth by being able to present tangible things.

Maybe missing "could" or "could do" after the word 'attention.'

That thought sent chills up both girl's spines.

s/girl's/girls'

Taniguchi winced. "Ah ... hey, look!" he exclaimed, pointing at a student near the gate. "It's a convenient change of subject!"

This line is great. :)

Looks like the reminder on Kuyou's post it note didn't make it in this time, eh? Oh well, maybe next time. :)

[JonBob]

Just a few corrections

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She wasn't doing the best job of what she'd just said she would do, was she?

Lots of "she"s.

Playing the role of hapless victim it quite unpleasant

"... is quite... "?

That really was the kind of thing Sasaki didn't do quite enough, just focusing on her studies, wasn't it?

Too many negations? Ends up sounding like "... didn't do quite enough, wasn't it?" Dunno, just awkward in general.

I saw we show her and her friend what ... hospitality we can in the back room, huh?"

"I say we ...."

Well, this is pretty much a "laying low" chapter. The reveal of Shinobu is interesting. Not sure where you're going with that, but interested (also, no explanation of source of Ninja Maid powers). What's interesting is that the thread started by that gets immediately built upon by the end with Tsuruya and Yuki.

The scenes with Yanagimoto and Sakanaka are interesting, in that they're getting a whiff that things in Haruhi-land aren't exactly normal. And Tani-baka indeed...

[Brian]

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First sentence of the second paragraph looks like a fragment. Is that meant to be a continuation of the last of the first paragraph?

Kind of!  Needed some expansion so:

"In some countries where women are not ... well respected, this free-spirited girl carelessly made some dangerous enemies.

     "They were those she had thought of as privileged and unable to understand the plight of those she wished to help.  Seeing as they didn't understand her, she saw no particular reason to respect them.  So because of this....  She had meant to help others, and instead had been careless of how her actions might hurt those around her.  That is ... as an activist, she brought attention on herself and her nearest allies carelessly, and when she realized what danger she was in...."

The paragraph seems to end there unexplainedly.

I assure you, it was complete in my head. @_@

"Yes!" the slider exclaimed happily, eyes wide.  "That--  Okay!"  Yuki recognized that was yet another instance where Kanae was glad to offer something to him and the others.  Normally she would just save energy, but more and more she was recognizing that giving room for others gave them a chance to spend some time with Kyon as well.  And wasn't doing _something_ for him an activity that they all enjoyed?

I'm not entirely sure--how are you punctuating that title lately? I seem to recall earlier in-story it being 'Kowa-Keigo Kyon' instead.

That's right; fixed. :)

Thanks, Alethiophile. :3

[Brian]

Meh. Beat to the first response, so I'll remove the stuff that was already covered.

Okay; thanks for the feedback. :D

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s/Sigh/She

Fix'd!

Three out of four responses here involve head shaking. Dunno if that warrants fixing, but it kind of stood out.

Will revise accordingly!

[spoiler]     She bit back the urge to sigh wistfully and merely bowed her head, returning to the present moment.  Tsuruya's living room was quite spacious, and Sasaki could only marvel at how considerate and friendly the girl seemed, given the relative opulence she must have been raised in. 

     "I should thank you," Sasaki said, shaking her head and offering the green-haired heiress a smile.  "After all, without your help...."  She trailed off and shrugged.

     "Ah, thinks nothing of that," Tsuruya said, waving a hand dismissively.  "Hmm, though--  I should apologize to you!  When we met some time ago at the beach, I said some unkind things, which I shouldn't!  A friend of Kyon's is a friend of mine, and so -- if you can, think of what I've done as an apology for that!"

     Sasaki blinked, remembering that incident suddenly.  It wasn't something that haunted her constantly ... but occasionally it did trouble her thoughts.  Certainly, she didn't like that it seemed almost as though she came across as a villain to her friend and his friends.

     "It's nothing," she said, shaking her head again.  "Sometimes there are mis-communications, and that ... well...."  Being entirely honest, it _did_ make her feel better that Tsuruya wanted to make amends for that.  "I -- I wasn't at my best that day, either.  But then, perhaps it's not constructive to dwell on that -- it's better to work toward a more positive future, isn't it?"  Absolutely, there was no sense dwelling on how much she realized she was hurt by the revelation of Kyon's engagement.

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s/interesting/interest in

He is ... the most interesting Kyon in the world.

MIKitW: "I don't often fight mooks, but when I do ... I do it for the Nakama.  Stay shounen, my friends."

s/account/count

Hmmm....  I think that account is actually still valid there.  As in, 'had value'.  But if it's getting tripped over, easily changed.

Maybe missing "could" or "could do" after the word 'attention.'

Yep, missing words.

s/girl's/girls'

Fix'd!

Taniguchi winced. "Ah ... hey, look!" he exclaimed, pointing at a student near the gate. "It's a convenient change of subject!"

This line is great. :)

One of my favorites! :D

Looks like the reminder on Kuyou's post it note didn't make it in this time, eh? Oh well, maybe next time. :)

We shall see![/spoiler]

And thanks again for taking the time to comment. :D

[Brian]

Just a few corrections

Always appreciated.

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She wasn't doing the best job of what she'd just said she would do, was she?

Lots of "she"s.

Hmm.  I should be able to revise that a bit.

Playing the role of hapless victim it quite unpleasant

"... is quite... "?

Yep.

That really was the kind of thing Sasaki didn't do quite enough, just focusing on her studies, wasn't it?

Too many negations? Ends up sounding like "... didn't do quite enough, wasn't it?" Dunno, just awkward in general.

I don't honestly see that.  Easy enough to revise anyway.

That really was the kind of thing Sasaki didn't do quite enough.  Usually she was just focusing on her studies.

Feels much less like her thoughts, but shouldn't trip anyone up.

I saw we show her and her friend what ... hospitality we can in the back room, huh?"

"I say we ...."

Yep!

The scenes with Yanagimoto and Sakanaka are interesting, in that they're getting a whiff that things in Haruhi-land aren't exactly normal. And Tani-baka indeed...

Okay!  Thanks again for the feedback. :D

[Guenther]

Thanks for the chapter! :-)

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He uses his seeming anger to fight against the controls used against him, and as he related things, he's actually doing his best to keep the Combine's actions ineffective.

"seething anger"?

Sasaki couldn't help but wonder if she should be more bothered by the way things had gone. Well, she knew some parts of it should not have worked out the way that they had — ending up tangled in an embrace with Kyon was actually nice.

Maybe its just me, but on first reading of that scene I missed that it begins with a flashback, and thought that Sasaki was embracing Kyon while talking to Tsuruya, or perhaps that the scene began before the last one ended. On re-read, its almost clear whats happening, of course. But are the logical and reasonable arguments raised now or during the hug? And perhaps it should be "had actually been nice" instead of "was actually nice".

[Ristridin]

Small correction:

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"You're claiming to be the finance of the legendary Kowa-Keigo Kyon?"

This should probably be fiancée. Also, you seem to be using the words fiance and fiancee, while the proper versions are fiancé and fiancée if I'm not mistaken.

Edit: Fixed a mistake in my correction... Guess I'm that bad.

[Specular]

Late-arriving C&C:

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"A...and so," Shinobu continued, her voice even shakier, "what I wish to say here, Suzumiya-dono, is that Haruka-chan tries her best– She means well, and she tries to be considerate; when those she cares about hurt, she hurts, too. But despite the best intentions ... she is often alone in the world."

when those she cares about hurt →  when those she cares about are/get hurt (?)

"He ... has been brought around to accepting that it is Haruka-chan's choice and it makes her happy," Shinobu replied, mildly evasive.

O_O

That was damn impressive of Shinobu. «Offscreen Moment Of Awesome» material, IMHO.

Sasaki couldn't help but wonder if she should be more bothered by the way things had gone. Well, she knew some parts of it should not have worked out the way that they had – ending up tangled in an embrace with Kyon was actually nice. Far too nice, really.

It's just me or the memory of that hug is keeping Sasaki from analyzing unimportant things like, let's say, several instances of supernatural phenomena taking place just a short while before their rescue? *nods sagely* Teens will be teens.

Haruhi winced, undoubtedly thinking back to the hug they'd shared with Kyon. "Tsuruya ... is not someone who would want us to be hurt like that," she said slowly.

s/Tsuruya/Tsu-chan/  (?)

His mother rolled her eyes while Kyon just wondered when his sister had become so devious.

Nonoko has the best role models for it, after all xD.

The two started the daily hike, and Mikuru resolved that one of these times, she was going to ask if Yuki couldn't help her get in better shape, too. She didn't want to get into fights, but being able to handle the hill would be a nice change.

Didn't Mikuru get something like enhanced stamina in early chapters together with Kyon and Kanae after the first sessions of their daily training (courtesy of Close-space!Haruhi)? I never quite got how that works, though.

Well, that would be nice, and she didn't mind being treated, but she wanted to cook for him, and wouldn't Shutaro visiting in the middle of the week raise questions? "A...actually, I was thinking maybe with Haruhi and Kanae-chan at my place?" she suggested. "That would be okay, wouldn't it?"

s/Haruhi/Haruhi-chan/

IINM, Japanese honorifics shouldn't be omitted even if they incur in reiteration (unless this really is mean to imply first name basis).

Though, when everyone came to the clubroom anyway, that issue was largely circumvented. As much as she had enjoyed spending time with both Tsuruya (unexpected, but incredibly pleasant) and Kyon the night before, she recognized an opportunity when she opened the clubroom door and found him already seated. Haruhi was to his right, and Kanae was to his left.

Minutiae: How come Yuki was the last one to arrive to the clubroom? IIRC, at some point in the novels Kyon mentioned that Nagato always gets there first so it seems kind of weird to me.

"Um, let's let Koizumi-kun go first," Kyon suggested, putting one arm around Yuki as he shifted slightly in his seat, shifting his knee to provide slightly better support.

s/Koizumi-kun/Koizumi/

"Hmm, I'll allow it," Haruhi decreed, nodding. "That's insanely cute! Can you just imagine her sitting like that and reading a book?"

I have to agree.

If his hands were occupied, it seemed only fitting that Yuki help him out, she determined. The logical solution was for her to take care of what he couldn't. Wasn't he always saying that they had to depend on one another?

"Here," she said softly, using her own chopsticks.

I tried but I couldn't find fanart of it :(. The closest match would be this picture with characters from another series.

"There was a tangle with some Sumiyoshi-reno last night," Tsuruya said, giving her head a short shake. "Kyon-kun set them straights, but, hmm, I will ask Mori-san to see if we can't find out a longer term solutions -- this irritation has been going on too long!"

s/Sumiyoshi-reno/Sumiyoshi-rengo/

"Shut up!" Yanagimoto hissed, strongly tempted to try stomping on the boy's food.

s/food/foot/

It wasn't precisely what she'd wanted, and Mikuru's apartment was very cozy with all of them there, but it was a pleasant environment.

The construct "was cozy..., but pleasant..." sounds a little strange to me. Perhaps busy/crowded instead of cozy? I'm not really sure.

"I– I like it, too," the time traveler volunteered from the stove, while Kanae studiously stirred a pot, her attention focused on the stove before her.

Considering the small size of Mikuru's apartment, how about using "hot plate" or "cooktop" instead of "stove"? /nitpicking

"Hmm, subtlety is overrated," Tsuruya sighed. "Today, I'll just tell you: I'm the daughter of Tsuruya Kenshiro. Except for my friend Yuki-nyan, here, I'm alone. I want to talk to your boss about things in Nishinomiya – specifically, I'm annoyed at you attacking my fiance so much!"

Regardless of whatever I could say about Tsuruya's actions in this chapter, I have to concede her this much -- she knows how to do wrong right by calling up Yuki's help.


About Yuki, I like a lot how this chapter subtly highlights how closely she pays attention to the other girls, especially Mikuru, to level up her social skills.


Taniguchi deserves a special mention. Goofing it up with such ludicrous precision has to be a superpower xD.

[Brian]

Thanks for the chapter! :-)

Sorry for the delay. :p

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He uses his seeming anger to fight against the controls used against him, and as he related things, he's actually doing his best to keep the Combine's actions ineffective.

"seething anger"?

Nope, 'seeming' because it's a front.  Well, partially a front.  I guess it's actually a bit fuzzy....  I think I'll leave this one in, but if anyone else comments or trips over it, I could change it easily enough.

Sasaki couldn't help but wonder if she should be more bothered by the way things had gone. Well, she knew some parts of it should not have worked out the way that they had — ending up tangled in an embrace with Kyon was actually nice.

Maybe its just me, but on first reading of that scene I missed that it begins with a flashback, and thought that Sasaki was embracing Kyon while talking to Tsuruya, or perhaps that the scene began before the last one ended. On re-read, its almost clear whats happening, of course. But are the logical and reasonable arguments raised now or during the hug? And perhaps it should be "had actually been nice" instead of "was actually nice".

That's an easy enough change -- will fix!

Thanks for taking the time to comment. :D

[Brian]

Small correction:

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"You're claiming to be the finance of the legendary Kowa-Keigo Kyon?"

This should probably be fiancée. Also, you seem to be using the words fiance and fiancee, while the proper versions are fiancé and fiancée if I'm not mistaken.

She's the new stand-in for the epic hero, Mask the Money!  A different kind of superhero!

Tsuruya-sama: "I approve!" :D

And you are correct about the accent mark.  I typically avoid it because....  Hmm.  At the time it caused issues with encoding.  I guess that's not really a problem anymore.  Well -- it's wrong, but I'll leave it as is for the time being.  At some point in the future before K:BDH is finalized, I will go through again and change all instances to be properly accented.

Edit: Fixed a mistake in my correction... Guess I'm that bad.

We all make mistakes. :p

Thanks for taking the time to comment!

[Brian]

Late-arriving C&C:

Not that late. :)

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"A...and so," Shinobu continued, her voice even shakier, "what I wish to say here, Suzumiya-dono, is that Haruka-chan tries her best– She means well, and she tries to be considerate; when those she cares about hurt, she hurts, too. But despite the best intentions ... she is often alone in the world."

when those she cares about hurt →  when those she cares about are/get hurt (?)

I think it's implied, but clarification doesn't hurt.

"He ... has been brought around to accepting that it is Haruka-chan's choice and it makes her happy," Shinobu replied, mildly evasive.

O_O

That was damn impressive of Shinobu. «Offscreen Moment Of Awesome» material, IMHO.

Y...eah. >.>;

It's just me or the memory of that hug is keeping Sasaki from analyzing unimportant things like, let's say, several instances of supernatural phenomena taking place just a short while before their rescue? *nods sagely* Teens will be teens.

Well, it's a lot more pleasant to think about than some other things.  Either she can dwell on her unrequited feelings, the inexplicable happenings about her rescue, the fact that she's being chased by the mob for reasons she doesn't understand, or, hey, that she got to ... 'accidentally' hug the guy she really likes.

Haruhi: "It's a crazy world when I can't even be tsundere and jealous about that.

Haruhi winced, undoubtedly thinking back to the hug they'd shared with Kyon. "Tsuruya ... is not someone who would want us to be hurt like that," she said slowly.

s/Tsuruya/Tsu-chan/  (?)

Right.  Some of my names are off due to how long it's been.  Bleah.  @_@

Nonoko has the best role models for it, after all xD.

A Nonoko with Tsuruya's cheer, Haruhi's energy, and Ryouko's guile.

The world is not ready.

Didn't Mikuru get something like enhanced stamina in early chapters together with Kyon and Kanae after the first sessions of their daily training (courtesy of Close-space!Haruhi)? I never quite got how that works, though.

Yeah, kind of.  Really, Haruhi just let them shrug off the effects (being tired) from not actually sleeping through the night, and instead getting the hyperbolic time chamber training.

s/Haruhi/Haruhi-chan/

IINM, Japanese honorifics shouldn't be omitted even if they incur in reiteration (unless this really is mean to imply first name basis).

Yeah, that was just an error on my part.  I try and be consistent about it (as demonstrated in Outcast).

Minutiae: How come Yuki was the last one to arrive to the clubroom? IIRC, at some point in the novels Kyon mentioned that Nagato always gets there first so it seems kind of weird to me.

Yeah, I wasn't sure if that could slide or not.  Added some flimsy justification. :p

Though, when everyone came to the clubroom anyway, that issue was largely circumvented -- though thanks to the president of the computer research society stopping her to ask for her help with an upgrade the following week, she was the last to arrive, instead of the first.

     So much for that particular 'habit'.

     That aside, as much as she had enjoyed spending time with both Tsuruya (unexpected, but incredibly pleasant) and Kyon the night before, she recognized an opportunity when she opened the clubroom door and found him already seated.  Haruhi was to his right, and Kanae was to his left.

s/Koizumi-kun/Koizumi/

Oops. :x

I have to agree.

:p

I tried but I couldn't find fanart of it :(. The closest match would be this picture with characters from another series.

I wouldn't be surprised if Grahf could find it, somehow. :p

s/Sumiyoshi-reno/Sumiyoshi-rengo/

Oops again!

s/food/foot/

So many typos. @_@

The construct "was cozy..., but pleasant..." sounds a little strange to me. Perhaps busy/crowded instead of cozy? I'm not really sure.

How about:

It wasn't _precisely_ what she'd wanted, and Mikuru's apartment was crowded with all of them there, but it was a cozy environment, thanks to the atmosphere.

Considering the small size of Mikuru's apartment, how about using "hot plate" or "cooktop" instead of "stove"? /nitpicking

Cooktop works.

Regardless of whatever I could say about Tsuruya's actions in this chapter, I have to concede her this much -- she knows how to do wrong right by calling up Yuki's help.


About Yuki, I like a lot how this chapter subtly highlights how closely she pays attention to the other girls, especially Mikuru, to level up her social skills.

Excellent -- glad both of those points worked! :)

Taniguchi deserves a special mention. Goofing it up with such ludicrous precision has to be a superpower xD.

He needed some screen time, though.

Okay!  Thanks very much for the feedback. :D

[Grahf]

All I could really find were a couple of images where Yuki is the one eating in Kyon's lap. Incidentally she's also been turned into a child, as have Mikuru and Haruhi.

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Anyways, I've been meaning to post some thoughts on this chapter, but I haven't been the best at finding errors. I'll try giving it a go over, but I think odds are I might just wind up musing on the content, rather than pointing out any errors.

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Certainly, she didn't like that it seemed almost as though she came across as a villain to her friend and his friends.

Incredibly minor, but the close repetition of friend seems a tad awkward to me. She's referring to both Kyon's group and Kyouko here, right? Might be better to use something like "to everyone involved in the conversation". Again, could be way off base here.

Mmm, not with your fault,

unnecessary "with" here, perhaps.

"what is your thoughts?"

Not sure if the s on thoughts is the verbal tic or not, if not then is should be are, I believe. If it is just the tic then no change is necessary. I'm mostly wondering because Kyon uses thoughts in his own dialogue after this.

Sasaki posted helplessly

posited? posed?



Anyways, that's roughly it for corrections, if indeed they are. A heavy chapter, all things considered. For some reason the Snow, Verses segment at the beginning gives me hope that whatever happens in the next chapter with this whole confrontation between Tsuruya and whoever she's planning on getting to in that building. Shinobu's story is pretty heartbreaking, but something tells me that she might be relating it to her niece sooner than later, even if now isn't a good time. It also seems that things with Kunikida must be coming to a head soon enough, although not before the attempted reveal of the masquerade to Sasaki.

All in all, quite the build up. I'm sure the resolution will be intriguing to say the least.

[Brian]

All I could really find were a couple of images where Yuki is the one eating in Kyon's lap. Incidentally she's also been turned into a child, as have Mikuru and Haruhi.

I remember that series.  I try to like it, but something about Mikuru/Koizumi squicks me too much to enjoy the bulk of comics that focus on that specifically (and the artist in general loves Mikuru/Koizumi).  I guess I just can't see it after Koizumi attacking her reputation to Kyon in Sigh. :/

Anyways, I've been meaning to post some thoughts on this chapter, but I haven't been the best at finding errors. I'll try giving it a go over, but I think odds are I might just wind up musing on the content, rather than pointing out any errors.

No problem. :D

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"what is your thoughts?"

Not sure if the s on thoughts is the verbal tic or not, if not then is should be are, I believe. If it is just the tic then no change is necessary. I'm mostly wondering because Kyon uses thoughts in his own dialogue after this.

Fixed the other errors you noticed.  This one was supposed to be Tsuruya's tic.  I try and basically use real words, just the wrong ones, when it comes up.  Just pluralizing things, mostly.

Sasaki posted helplessly

posited? posed?

Not sure what I meant anymore. O_O

Went with 'said'. >_>;

Anyways, that's roughly it for corrections, if indeed they are. A heavy chapter, all things considered. For some reason the Snow, Verses segment at the beginning gives me hope that whatever happens in the next chapter with this whole confrontation between Tsuruya and whoever she's planning on getting to in that building. Shinobu's story is pretty heartbreaking, but something tells me that she might be relating it to her niece sooner than later, even if now isn't a good time. It also seems that things with Kunikida must be coming to a head soon enough, although not before the attempted reveal of the masquerade to Sasaki.

All in all, quite the build up. I'm sure the resolution will be intriguing to say the least.

Okay, sounds like I'm on a good track, then. :D

Thanks for taking the time to post your feedback; I'll try and get an updated copy in the first post later today. :)