A little parody I wrote a while back

[thepanda]

I was looking through a bunch of old files in my yahoo briefcase while looking for... something... and found this old parody poem I wrote in school. I chuckled a little after reading it again after so long and thought I'd share. Points to anyone who can name what poem is being parodied.^_^

Parody

I met a traveler from an antique land
Who said: Two vast and rubb'ry legs of scales
Stand in the city... Near them, on a stand,
Half drunk, a happy figure lies, whose ale,
And wrinkled brow, and grin of lost command,
Tell that its wearer well these rampages read
As yet he survives; and stamping on these lifeless things,
The tail that crushed them, the flames that fed:
Above the sirens words rent the air:
"Do not panic. A trap, our army springs:
Look at our science, ye Mighty, and despair!"
Nothing beneath remains. Back to the bay
The lord of monsters turns, crushed and beaten
The remains of Tokyo stretch far away.

[Dracos]

....I recognize what you are parodying.   Ozmandius was the name of it  methinks..  Was nary a year ago I read it.

if you are going for rhyme scheme it's off in a few place.  Notably as this is a  rhythmic poem it does sort of give it some jaunts in certain areas.  You might want to include the poem being parodied for comparison purposes.

Personally, I felt the reference  to tokyo fell flat....  what would have worked better is hiroshima.  In  context and all.

Fearless Leader

[thepanda]

Yep, but its spelled Ozymandias.


1       I met a traveller from an antique land
2     Who said: Two vast and trunkless legs of stone
3     Stand in the desert. Near them, on the sand,
4     Half sunk, a shattered visage lies, whose frown,
5     And wrinkled lip, and sneer of cold command,
6     Tell that its sculptor well those passions read
7     Which yet survive, stamped on these lifeless things,
8     The hand that mocked them, and the heart that fed;
9     And on the pedestal these words appear:
10   "My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
11   Look on my works, ye Mighty, and despair!"
12   Nothing beside remains. Round the decay
13   Of that colossal wreck, boundless and bare
14   The lone and level sands stretch far away.


Yeah the rhythm gets way off at line 9. I recall agonizing over that (and line 7) because our English teacher suddenly kicked up the deadline of the mini-mags we were working on by 2 weeks. Everyone had to do several haiku, cinquains, a parody, a freestyle-rap type story, an elegy, an eye poem, and a bunch of other stuff. I wish I still had that eye poem. It was that pic of Rei (Eva) that has her sinking in water. The words I used for it were-

Deep within myself
    My mind fractures
         In a void of loneliness
              Submerged
                   In the boundless
Blue.

[Dracos]

Now that der is tasty stuff.
Verily.

^_^

Fearless Leader
Likes monologues

[thepanda]

Thanks.^_^