A trip to self

[Rakhal]

Produce of my latest trip to ff.net

Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2318096/1/
(sorry about forgetting that before)
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Title: A trip to self (10 parts)
File: Not stored in the Ranma Archives
Author: Trugeta (No Email)
Crossover: Tenchi Muyo
Rakhal Likes: 1
Matchup: Ranma+Kasumi
Flags: Drama, Continuation, Quality Fair
Created: 28-04-2005

Life has been getting worse for Ranma since the failed wedding. With Kasumi's
help, he's managed to improve his speech and control somewhat his foot-in-mouth
disease. His improved behaviour hasn't impressed Akane though, who seems to be
getting angrier than ever. At least things are going better with Ryoga. How
long can Ranma stand this? How long can Kasumi go on trying to help her
younger sister win Ranma when she doesn't believe that she deserves him?

Incomplete 214pp
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[Ginrai]

Need a link to the fic :)

[KLSymph]

Having skimmed the beginning, middle, and end chapters, I give it a pretty solid "Meh".

From what I can see, it doesn't really have any of the things I look for in a truly high-quality story, like a very immersive atmosphere, clever and effective use of prose, memorable scenes or character interactions, and the like. Of course, I didn't read the entire thing or read very carefully what I did read, so I may have a wrong view of the story as a whole, but what I saw was pretty uninteresting to me (which is subjective, of course). Looked a little cliche. Telling over Showing was my impression. Also, the formatting is weird, which didn't help.

On the other hand, no truly noteworthy problems either, beyond maybe a little frivolous use of Japanese. I rate such stories as "decent" on my personal scale, which is a 3/5 on the poll's scale. I might read it more fully if I had the time, but I wouldn't go out of my way if what I saw holds throughout the piece.

[Edward]

Claims to be following the manga, but based on tired fanon cliches.  Characterization that makes the anime portrayals look deep.  Not proofread.

Which makes it about average for ff.net.  I give it a 2.